Monsters or children? This is what two young boys have been called. Venables and Thomson are those boys who killed an innocent little boy named James Bulger.
These two boys are best friends, same age, same school. These two planned the heartbraking murder of James. They took the live of a young boy (2 years old). They will regret everything because NOW their lives will never be the same again. They will be known by every individual as monsters not children.
Monsters not children for the shocking death of a boy who had no idea his life will end so soon. Monsters for not thinking about the consequences of killing James.
Once they were caught, they were questionned one by one. During the investigation, Thomas was being more deviant to outwit the police, but they found he was behind this murder. Through the help of Venables parents, he confessed it was them who had planned to murder James. He (told by Venables) was enouaged by Thomson to kill little James.
Venables described the process, "taking off the trainers and socks..."
With the help of Venables, the investigators found the truth (Thomson plan), as they suspected before, when Robert Thomson was asked if he had stolen battries (before the murder), but he denied it. However, when the body was found...
Commentary:
At the beginning of the voiceover, I questioned the audience by the given title of the recast task, this is to engage the audience to continue watching the TV documentary and it is eyecatching. I used the repetition of the word 'monsters' to emphasise the meaning of the word and to show how serious it is. Throughout the voiceover, I explained it in detail, this is to inform the mass audience.
This seems a little rushed, rather a lot of errors are apparent. Perhaps you could look at reworking this with a little more time and writing a commentary to go with it.
ReplyDeleteWWW : the topic is relatively clear
ReplyDeleteEBI : re read your work also make it longer